Saturday, 28 July 2012

My firtst glps writing homework♥

-Three things you know to be true-


Lots of  things make me angry and nervous. However, some things make me happy and relaxing. Playing,sleeping and paintings are examples of my favorite things. And here are three things I know to be true.

 

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First, goint to Homeplus with my brother makes me fantastic. During, our trip to Homeplus we talk and look at the veiw. I cannot talk with my brother usually, so talking with my brother makes me happy. Also, when we arrived at Homeplus brother helps me buy stuffs that I needed, and sometimes he buy some delicious foods for me. He also takes care of me not to get hurt. So going to Homeplus with my brother makes me fantastic.

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Next, when I read books, I feel like I'm in another world. Book makes me feel like I'm in the book, sometimes I become an owner of palace or sometimes I become a beautiful woman who lived in Paris. So reading books is my old hobby. I always bring one or two books with me. If I didn't bring books, I feel nervous.

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Finally, sleeping makes me happy and relaxing. Sleeping is one of my favorite things to do. when I sleep, I forget everyting so I feel like it's really comfortable and not comlicated. So, to feel that feelings I sleep more than other people. I sleep alone, and I usually hope to dream that I meet my friends and play! Sometimes, my dream come true in the real life that is really strange! I think everyone had that situation. In my dream, I was announced in front of my classmates and about two days later, I really announce in front o fmy classmates in science class!

썸네일In conclusion, my favorite things makes me happy relaxing and great. Everyone will have their own favorite things. These are able to release our stress nad give us energy. Think about your three things you know to be true and enjoy it a lot.

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5 comments:

  1. Jiyoung Victoria Sim30 July 2012 at 18:38

    Hi Chaewon:) I really liked your writing. I liked how you tried to organize them into five paragraphs and add as much details as you can. There are some minor grammatical mistakes, so try to deal with them next time:D Keep up the good work!

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  2. Daniel kim30 July 2012 at 18:45

    I like your writing very much, for the tone with which you deliver your story is soothing and fun. This essay shows how amicable a person you are and will make the readers, at least me, want to meet you. It, however, still has some grammatical problems.

    First, goint to Homeplus with my brother makes me fantastic.-> First, going to Homeplus with my brother makes me feel fantastic.

    Second, sleeping makes me happy and relaxing.-> sleeping makes me happy and relaxed.

    There are some more of this kind of errors, so I suggest you reread your writing and try to fix the problems. Good Luck!

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  3. Unknown30 July 2012 at 21:48

    Hi- Thank you for sharing. I also like the tone of your writing. Think about presentation though when you chose a font color- the first and second paragraphs are hard to read because of the color of the font.

    Please remember to spell cehck your post before hitting publish as well. Good luck!

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  4. Unknown31 July 2012 at 00:14

    I think your essay was great!!!
    Thank you for sharing us about you 3things
    that you know to be true.^^

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  5. Unknown31 July 2012 at 00:15

    Thank everyone to commet in my blog

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